✅ (1) Corrective Feedback on Your Essay (Teacher Style)

(I will quote your errors, explain why, and give the corrected form.)

A. Grammar & Form-Focused Feedback

1. Subject–verb agreement

❌ many peoples has
✔️ many people have
Explanation: “People” is already plural; we use “have.”

❌ This problem happen
✔️ This problem happens
Explanation: Singular subject → verb ends with s.

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2. Countable/Uncountable nouns

❌ time managements
✔️ time management (uncountable)

❌ many peoples
✔️ many people

❌ procrastinations become a big habits
✔️ procrastination becomes a big habit

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3. Word form / plural mistakes

❌ daily lifes
✔️ daily life
Explanation: “Life” becomes “lives” when plural, but here it should be uncountable.

❌ many simple solutions (correct) but later
❌ overcome this habits
✔️ overcome this habit

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4. Missing apostrophes

❌ dont / couldnt / its / themself
✔️ don’t / couldn’t / it’s / themselves

Explanation: Contractions need apostrophes.

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5. Sentence clarity

❌ This mean they keep delaying their works
✔️ This means they keep delaying their work.

Explanation: “Work” in this context is uncountable.

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6. Run-on / comma issues

❌ This problem happen in school, jobs, and even daily lifes, and it can cause bad results…
✔️ This problem happens in school, jobs, and even daily life, and it can cause bad results…

Explanation: Too many ideas packed; needs clearer structure, but it’s acceptable for simple writing.

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📘 (2) Suggestions to Improve Your Essay (Based on Marking Rubric)

A. Grammar Accuracy – What to Improve
	•	Use correct plural forms (“people,” not “peoples”).
	•	Improve subject–verb agreement (“procrastination causes,” not “cause”).
	•	Fix missing apostrophes (“don’t,” “couldn’t”).
	•	Avoid repeating the same error (“managements,” “lifes”).

Exemplar Improved Sentence

Before: Many peoples dont have good time managements.
After: Many people don’t have good time management.

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B. Lexical Sophistication (Better Vocabulary)

Your vocabulary is simple (which is fine!), but to score higher you can use:
	•	“one major weakness” instead of “one big shortcoming”
	•	“underlying causes” instead of “some causes”
	•	“reduce distractions” instead of “turn off phones”
	•	“task breakdown” instead of “small pieces”

Exemplar Improved Sentence

Procrastination often occurs because individuals lack effective time management and feel overwhelmed by complex tasks.

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C. Argument Structure (Content-Focused Criteria)

Your structure is clear:
✔ cause paragraph
✔ solution paragraph
✔ conclusion

To improve:
	•	Add specific examples (personal, school, social).
	•	Make each cause and solution more detailed.
	•	Connect ideas with linking words: because, therefore, however, in addition.

Exemplar Improved Paragraph

One major cause of procrastination is poor time management. For example, students often delay assignments because they underestimate how long the task will take. As a result, they rush at the last minute and produce lower-quality work.

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D. Orientation to Evidence (Examples, logic)

Currently, your essay speaks in general terms.
To score higher, add:
	•	examples from school
	•	examples from everyday life
	•	short explanations of why it matters

Exemplar Evidence Sentence

For instance, many teenagers spend hours on social media, which reduces the time available for homework and leads to last-minute studying.

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⭐ Summary (Easy to Use for Homework Sheet)

✔ Corrective Feedback:

I corrected your grammar (plural nouns, apostrophes, verb agreement), improved vocabulary, fixed unclear expressions, and pointed out repeated structural issues.

✔ Suggestions for Improvement:

I recommended using stronger vocabulary, adding examples, improving transitions, and giving clearer cause–effect explanations.

✔ Exemplars Included:

I provided improved sentences and model paragraphs to show what a higher-quality version looks like.